Thursday, November 3, 2011

Double-Crossing

You tell yourself it’s not bitter;  
so many times they disappear 
You left me with the goodbye jitters.

I sometimes wonder if my laugh is simply a titter,
everyone else's seems so sincere.
You tell yourself it’s not bitter.

More people vacate, I’m not a quitter:     
I hope I can make that completely clear.
You left me with the goodbye jitters. 

There’s the deception that I’m better, 
yearning isn’t worth the aching spear.
You tell yourself it’s not bitter.

My head is filled with this clatter,
I wish that it would go away, that it wouldn’t be here.
You left me with the goodbye jitters.

You should be aware; you were a terrible begetter
this nonsense made my head slightly queer 
You tell yourself it’s not bitter
You left me with the goodbye jitters.

2 comments:

  1. Rori,

    This is well done - the tone here comes out clear. The turn in the final quatrain comes out as well. Nice job. The rhyme scheme even reinforce the idea.

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  2. Though, you could work on giving the poem imagery.

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